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The blade;
  subtle in its temptation, gleaming in the delicate sunlight.
I try to resist, but as the sun beam fades, so with it does the light within me.
I grasp the handle,
hold it close to my chest, point to my heart.
Time around me stops…. I’m all alone, only I exist
I wait……
   Taking in all around me.
then I take in a last breath before….


before driving the knife through my hardened heart with relentless vigour.
Finally I’m free, finally I'm released, finally I feel myself escape from the cage
I look back at the lifeless shell I’ve left behind
And as time restarts no-one notices the limp body laying in the gutter.
The sun, again, pierces through the darkened clouds;
reflecting off the fallen blade.
Then I see the next desperate soul collapse to their knees,
taking the blade into their clutches.
I watch helplessly as I see him contemplate what he is about to do.
Time slows.
Stops!
then the deep breath, I look away as I know what comes next.
The fatal cycle is repeated, completed!
But soon it shall be started again.
And so, as it once was so shall it be again, the pain of the,

Fatal Cycle!
©2004-2009 ~gods-gorgeous-goth
:icongods-gorgeous-goth:

Author's Comments

I really dont know what possessed me to right this, i normally cant write unless im in the mood of which the poem is set but this time it just appeared on the page.
Part of the reason i did want to write a poem like this though is because of a comment i got, saying how suicide isnt glamourous. So i have decided to show that suicide is a part of our life thats happened throughout history, and though we may not like it, its all around us

Another thing i think that this poem convays is the way that Suicide is final, and it wont get the attention that it is aimed for with some cases.

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:iconacidlullaby6:
wow, I love it. You are right, it is a fatal cycle and it isn't as glamourous as people make it out to be. I had a friend who commited suicide. I love your poem, though. Keep it up.

-Jess

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Hi, my name is Jessica and I'm an alcoholic.
:icongods-gorgeous-goth:
Thankyou, for your comment and your fave:D
glad some liked it:dance:
:iconvelvet-moonshine:
Oh my! This is truly fantabulous! You have such a wonderful talent there- i love your imagery and just the whole poem! I love the bit about the sun piercing through the darkened clouds, as it's like a metaphor for the blade piercing through the darkened heart. Very well done again- tis gr8. I would also like to add that suicide is horrible and you portray this very well- for example, when you are watching the fatal cycle being repeated...completed, you look away, knowing how terrible it is and one gets the impression that you have condemned yourself to an eternity of pain (that is, via watching other people committ suicide), as a result of committing suicide and what's worse than that, I ask? The feeling in this poem is tremendously potent. Please carry on writing such gr8, inspiring poetry...
:iconacidlullaby6:
LOL no prob. Hope you get more favs.!!

-Jess

PS Keep up the good work!!

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Hi, my name is Jessica and I'm an alcoholic.
:icongods-gorgeous-goth:
Thankyou so much for your comment, i love the way you put as much passion into them as you do your poetry. I appologize if i dont comment on your always, well rearly but your work is great, i think i have a couple of your pices as favourites.
So keep Smiling :D :dance:
:iconroseofdarkness666:
Great poem. It's going on my favorites list.
:iconvelvet-moonshine:
Oh, worry not kind gentleman, for I am honoured enough at the fact that you like my poetry and have favouritised some of my work. (Big smiley face!). Yes, i always try to comment as fully as I can on pieces, but, unfortunately, i sometimes find myself short of time. Thus, I cannot write copious amounts. However, i truly believed that your fantastic poem merited a vast amount of comments. So, well done once again!
:icongods-gorgeous-goth:
lol thanks V. much glad you liked it :dance::D
:iconalwayzdazd:
hits home..i have had 2 family members commit suicide..and it NEVER accomplishes what it was meant to. only feeds their selfish needs. it is so easy to get caught up in your pain..and this proved that very well. a very strong piece.

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Am I the star beneath the stairs?

Am I a ghost upon the stage?

Am I your anything?


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